My dear, do you know,
How a long time ago,
Two poor little children,
Whose names I don't know,
Were stolen away
On a fine summer's day,
And left in a wood,
As I've heard people say.
And when it was night
So sad was their plight,
The sun it went down,
And the moon gave no light.
They sobbed and they sighed
And they bitterly cried,
And long before morning
They lay down and died.
And when they were dead
The robins so red
Brought strawberry leaves
And over them spread;
And all the day long,
The green branches among,
They'd prettily whistle
And this was their song-
'Poor babes in the wood!
Sweet babes in the wood!
Oh the sad fate of
The babes in the wood!'
(Nursery rhyme)
“911, where is your emergency?”
“They are gone! They were just in front of me and now they are gone!”
“Ma’am please try to calm down. Where are you located?”
“I-I’m at Grizzly Park off Grand and 12th…please hurry!”
Bob and Linda’s twins went missing Thursday at 4:48pm at Grizzly Park. Soon after the 911 call police arrived to the scene to investigate. Unfortunately, what was left was little to no evidence. Officer Mort, who was in charge of this missing case turned to the parents hoping to find a better lead.
Linda was talking with another cop when Officer Mort walked up. While choking on her tears she managed to explain the scene, “they were just swinging and running around for one second and then the next they were gone. I only looked away for a second.” Bob continued to comfort Linda when he began to describe that one of the twins was wearing a red dress with a matching bow while the other one was wearing shorts with a green t-shirt.
A search party was gathered and began at 6:00pm where they started to search further into the woodsy area that surrounded the park. Before it was dark, a whistle was blown a mile or so out of the park, which in turn means that a volunteer or officer found something that could be evidence. As Linda ran to the sound of the whistle she arrived to a volunteer holding the matching red bow to her daughter’s dress. At that point her and Bob were frantic to find their twins and only started to get careless so Officer Mort had them sent back to the station to get some rest.
It was 1:03am when Officer Mort announced to meet back at Grizzly Park at 8:00am the following morning. Supposedly, the night the twins went missing there was a severe thunderstorm that hit the area around 4:30am that morning.
The sun was shining in between the leaves letting leftover rain droplets fall below. Birds were chirping and taking turns bathing in the puddles beneath the trees. As they continued their search through the slippery mud and protruding branches they soon found recent tracks that led to a nearby river. Another whistle was blown as they came closer to the river. Volunteers were gathered around a tree trunk that had fallen where they soon found the twins. They were peacefully laying there, beside the fallen tree and a bed of red tulips. Officer Mort called the time of death-it was 10:14am.
Author's Note. The rhyme that I shared above and my story beneath have identical plots. In the rhyme two children went missing and struggled throughout their night in the woods. They soon were found dead with strawberry leaves on them left by robins. I always find mysteries and missing cases interesting so I just planned on taking the rhyme and making into a modern situation of parents losing their kids, in this case twins. Instead of robins specifically leaving strawberry leaves on the children I gave the scene more imagery by describing what it sometimes is like after the storm along with the bed of red tulips that surrounded the bodies.
Bibliography. This story was based on the nursery rhyme, "The Babes in the Woods" in The Nursery Rhyme Book, edited by Andrew Lang.
Hi Courtney, my name is Heather.I am in your mythology group for week one. Your story was very intriguing. I love how you posted the nursery rhyme before your story. It worked as an interlude to your own story. I really love the way the two stories parallel one another. I found myself trying to ready faster to find out if the twins would be found safely, or if they were met with tragedy. The ending seemed rightfully poetic. The only thing I can think of that might have made your story more compelling is to give more description to the twins. If the reader knew the children's names and details about them the story becomes more personal. Maybe the twins were both girls or maybe one was a boy and the other a girl. You could describe how they looked. Were they well behaved children? I really enjoyed your story and look forward to reading your introduction blog post.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job of telling this story. It is very gripping and sad. I also find mystery stories very interesting. For some reason this story reminds of the book, "The Face on the Milk Carton" by Caroline B. Cooney. I'm not entirely sure why because no one dies in this story but it is all about a missing child finding her family. I'm not sure if you have ever read the series but it sounds like you might enjoy it. The lead in to your story by posting the rhyme first was really good. It was the perfect set up for mystery. Great job!
ReplyDeleteYour story is such an interesting twist on that nursery rhyme, certainly not something I would have come up with myself. After reading your story, though, I can completely see where you got the idea and how the two match. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI also liked how you posted the rhyme before your story. It made it very easy to compare the two. I like your take on the story by making it more modern and very realistic. Your story was very easy to follow and I liked that. Mysteries are also one of my favorites and I'm glad you wrote in a style that you find interest in making it more easy to express your thoughts. I look forward to reading more of your posts!
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ReplyDeleteWow! I love the way you set up the story- you can really empathize with the parents and their feelings about losing their twins. One of my worst fears is going missing (though specifically being kidnapped) and you definitely played on this fear! You did a great job of adapting this story to fit your specific writing style.
On a side note- wow this is a dark nursery rhyme! I guess a lot of nursery rhymes are pretty dark (ring around the rosey, for example) that we don't really understand at first glance.
I wonder how the parents will cope with the loss of their two kids- I can't even imagine. It seems as if the kids were peaceful when they were found- maybe this will bring the parents some kind of relief.
Great story and adaptation! I really enjoyed this interpretation. I look forward to reading more from you throughout the semester :-)
Wow I just love your story so much! Your writing is incredible and the way you set the story up was the coolest thing. But I agree with Emily above me, it was a very dark nursery rhyme, but because of this, it was very cool to read. I always liked darker types of stories! I definitely did not see the ending of your story coming- great way to keep people on their toes!
ReplyDeleteCourtney, I really enjoyed your story. Your plot line kept the reader hooked the entire time. I am a sucker for mysteries so it was no surprise to me that your story grabbed my attention from the very get go. It’s funny because when I initially read the poem, a modern mystery case like the one you wrote came to my mind as well. In your story I was captivated by the characters of the two missing kids, it made me wonder why those kids got lost in the woods and what caused them to go to sleep. How and why did they struggle through the woods. What if in your story you added more background information of what the family dynamic was or maybe how the two kids acted individually and together? I believe that would add further depth to the story and allow your readers to appreciate the characters even more than they already do. Incredible job, looking forward to reading more of your work in the future.
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